(Yeiliel, 24, sandy brown hair, grey eyes, was put into an insane asylum when he came home to find his wife brutally murdered and displayed because he stood against a high-end con. [I hope this works, I'm not used to them])

Never will I go back! I'm not crazy and they don't know I'm okay! I'll live here, I can go home. Go home and live with Liddi!

It was, in fact, the deepest heart of winter; and even though he was being searched for, Yeiliel looked at the snow and saw the image of his recently murdered wife. She wore her best pearls, the velvet red dress with the white fur trim, and her bright, stunning smile lit up their dinningroom! She had always been beautiful. Kind, and beautiful.

It had been months since he had walked into his home to find his beautiful young wife hung from the oak banister by Christmas lights and decorated as though she were a floating tree. Revenge was an evil feeling, and his wonderful Lidiana had paid the price for his morality; the crook he had convicted had broken free of the escort and found the worst way to hurt Yeiliel.

It had been that moment, that very moment, Yeiliel's mind had snapped. He had detached himself from the world in every imaginable way. He had been blind, deaf and mute for nearly a year, his body languid and his heart a dark black, burned hole in his world. They had kept him in safe rooms, tried to get him to speak; to talk about what he had seen. What had happened to his life.

After the death of his wife a girl that was 20 years old she looked like his wife but was not her. Her name was Alice Snow she was a pretty girl. Alice lived where the wife was killed at and Alice heard about it but never knew why she did. Later found out the wife husband went crazy and went to a hospital.

Alice as long light brown hair light blue eyes and her skin very soft and beautiful as well. Alice lives with her father her mother died some years back and Alice always went past the house and felt something bad but sad around the place. Alice went past the hospital a few times and she would always see a man at the window but never know who he was.

Alice had a man in her life and she was happy being with him and would be happy forever......

Yeiliel only had a few blocks to go before he was home. Home where his beautiful wife was, where his happy life and great job were! He had missed Liddi so much over the past 9 months! He wanted to hold her in his arms and let her know he wouldn't have to go away any more! He stood in front of the old Victorian style house, his smile wide and eyes brimming with tears of joy! He ascended the steps, but a shadow caught his eye, making him pause.

It was a man. Why was a man in the house? Was it Markus, his best friend, telling Liddi he'd be home soon? He had always been a great friend in that way, wanting to assure her he'd be home and safe soon. He laughed, but the tone was rough and slightly off. As if it came from a darker place than him. He turned the knob, but it wouldn't budge. His brow furrowed in furstraition, he fumbled for his keys, realizing he had to of left them in the cab he had taken."That's alright, I'll just get Liddi to let me in."

He knocked, waiting for a few minutes before knocking again. It was so late and freezing, he needed in the house to sleep and hold his wife. He had missed her so much.

Alice was walking down the street and looked at the sky and heard someone broke out the hospital but didn't know who and when she walked down the street to get to her house she saw a man at a house. Alice thought he was looking for someone and she felt bad for him.

Alice sigh and then went up to him and said it her calm sweet voice "Sir is everything is alright can I help you?" Alice looked at him with her blue eyes the wind blow her light brown hair.

Yeiliel saw her, his beautiful Liddi! His smile grew bigger, his eyes brighter and happy."Liddi! Oh, I've missed you so much! I'm sorry my business trip took so long. I had no idea they would try to convince me I wasn't fit to run the company anymore. I had to straighten all of that out."

He had hugged her, not noticing that she wasn't his wife, and that she looked a bit freaked out by his sudden friendliness with her. He only cared that he was home, and in his eyes she was his wife.

Alice heard him calling his wife name and then he hugged her and she was in shock and she remembered him from the papers and was in shock still. Alice pushed him away a bit and said "I'm sorry Sir but she is dead I'm Alice I live next door and I know it is hard to hear but it is the truth." Alice felt sorry for him and he might not know what happen she heard he was not himself but she felt sorry for him.

Alice was looking at him and she did look like his wife but she as been gone and Alice had sadness in her eyes but she was freaked out a bit then he is here and she was worried as well.

Yeiliel stood there for a moment, digesting her words. Sharp images flashed through his mind of a nightmare he used to have, but he shook his head and then smiled again, chuckling."You're so silly my little wife. How about we go out for supper tonight? I'm feeling some diner food. Maybe Lorie can make us out special dessert tonight since I'm finally home. whaddaya say,Pumpkin?"

He held out his hand with expectancy that she would take it, his body shaking from the cold he no longer noticed.

Alice looked at him and she was scared of him a bit and she had fear in her eyes and she saw he had his hand out for her to take it and knew he thought she was his wife and she looked scared and said. "I'm not your wife Sir My Name is Alice." Alice ran away from him and went to her house and locked the door and went to her room and then got a call for her boyfriend and she giggled and smiled and she told her boyfriend she loved him.

After Alice was done on the phone she took off her day clothes and put on a tank top and some shorts and laid on her bed and fell asleep and her window was opened.

It was all clear now, the horrable nightmares of her being killed were showing him that she didn't love him anymore! She was leaving him! He felt his anger rising as he stormed off, following the road to the small diner on the corner. Frightened stares met him as he sat at the counter, a red head hesitantly serving him."Hey, Leil. How ya been?"

She was terrified of him, he could see that. He had never seen her so scared before."Hey Lorie, why are you so scared? It's just me."

"Right, what was I thinking?"She took out her pencil, but couldn't keep herself from shaking."What'll ya have?"

"Lorie, I think Liddi is leaving me."He sighed deeply as he looked at the menu."she acted as if she had never loved me. I'll just have some coffee okay?"

She nodded and tried to smile, pressing the button under the counter to alert the police."I think you're over reacting, you've been away for a long time."

He chuckled and nodded as she poured the drink. She was relaxing a bit more after his chuckle, as if she didn't think he would hurt her as badly now that she had made him laugh."Yeah, I guess I have. I just have to spend time with her is all."

Alice was still sleeping until she was having nightmares but then she woke up and looked around and rubbed her eyes. Alice got up and she yawned and went down to the kitchen and went to get something to eat her father was out of town and knew he won't be back for a long while.

Alice got down to the kitchen and made herself some popcorn and went to watch a movie and it was a horror movie and she watched it for a a hour and she was a bit scared of the movie. After the movie Alice fell right asleep on the couch while the horror movie was still playing.

I'm sorry. I can't continue this anymore, I am very sorry, and I know you're doing your best. Thank you so much for trying with me.

(sigh)

I'm sorry, nina. The only thing I can't stand when roleplaying is someone controlling my character, the rest is fine. I can read pas all of that stuff and make it make sense in my head, but I cannot stand when someone else takes my character or tries to include themselves in every scene with my character. I was trying to space it out a bit to give our roleplay more life and depth, but you keep shoving Alice into the scene with my character even when she don't belong; and making my character go in a direction I didn't want him to. I'm honestly not trying to be mean, and none of this is meant to sound mean, truly, but I just cant stand when that stuff happens. I'm sorry, nina.

I wasn't taking control of him i really was isn't now i give up on roleplaying now

Why would you give up on roleplaying? I'm not telling you to give up, just think a bit more and put that thought into the roleplay. Also, this; "that much and then she saw he was looking at her and she was scared a bit and was worried. " is controlling him. Even when she shouldn't have been in the scene, she was there. I was trying to go into more depth. I understand not everyone else does, and I apologize for steering off course in your plan, I just felt it was going too fast and would have been done too soon for it to be a worth while roleplay.

i had to write that i'm trying to be like everyone else people tell me that my writing is bad and they want someone that as better writing i am tired of it and you know i can redo it and we can keep the rp you know that right?

I don't think your writing is all that bad. You should see my sister's. She don't make [I]any[I] kind of sense at all! You're like a walking grammer book compared to her! She's learning though. I'm proud of her. Off topic, anyway, I like the roleplay - great idea, good storyline, just a huge deal breaker with me is what I mentioned. Otherwise yeah! Yeah lets keep going! I'm having fun playing Mr. Creepyinsaneman!

(Okay i re did it is it a little better if it is not just tell me okay i do like this roleplay it)

(I will have to reply later, I'm exhausted. It's 3am here.)

(okay I'm still awake sadly)

Yeiliel left before the police arrived, even with the pleading of Lorie, who had hoped to give him the help he needed. He found himself sitting across the road, watching the window of the woman he loved more than life itself. He watched her through the curtains, her shadow showing her with a bowl, sitting on the couch. She was beautiful, as young and beautiful as the night he left.

Alice woke up a few minutes after the horror movie was over she sat up and she yawn and then she got the bowel of popcorn and took the bowel to the kitchen and starts to watch the dishes. Alice was down washing the dishes and she head up to the bathroom to wash up a bit and getting ready for bed. Alice went to her room and sat down on the bed and laid down on the bed and fell right to sleep.