Geisha's passion:heart:

You see my mask face
I give you a grace
I am a geisha
And want give you passion

My days is alone
My life be a one
Please give me your heart
Destroy my love dirt

I can't see a sun
I just blind woman
You can give me more
But passion is alone


The end of love:heart:

The end of love
You give me today
Why we can't choose
Next beautiful way

My tears give you happy
But i want to die
My life is not candy
I want give you lie

The end of love
You give me today
But i'm not love you
And it's one of way

The man of the star:heart:

The man of the star
Have got a mum
Her hands is golden
Her heart not broken

Her smile is big
She touch my lip
I love he now
But he ask: How?


It's not very much poetry, but i can write more=3. If you like my write style, please, donate.:)
Thank you, my thread visitor.;)

In the first one it seems you're missing words although a nice choice of subject.

The second one the tenses are slightly amiss and again missing a word here and there.

Again same flaws with the third.

Try reading you're poetry aloud and read each word carefully to make sure you have them all. Another suggestion is reading a bit up on verb tenses. You're using good verbs but the wrong tense several times.