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Old 07-23-2008, 09:07 PM

Okay these Tankas are my first ones and I had about seventy Tankas when I lost my notebook so I am going to write the ines you might like and then I will hope some people will reply. Some of these might seem strange or emo but i'm not an emo person i jst happened to think of these with no emotions and some were with emotion but minds can be a strange place to keep emotions locked up, andit can also surprise people what's actuall in there instead of what you expected.

My heart fills with joy
As the river flls down the back
And cools the mountain
Never will my heart stray from here
As it dances in the moonlight

My mind weakens each day
As the bird is no longer a flight
I wait day by day
For my mind to reutrn to me
Woe to me! Who will never wake

The dead shall sleep on
But as they lie in the graves
No living thing grows
The butterfly will not land here
For death has laid down his hand

Princess of Darkness
Oh how sweet and treacherous
Her name- For she holds
No peace in her heart
For she holds the ball of fire

Xenon, the Lord of Morodor
He brings about the end
Darkness will cover all living
For none will ever cross his path
He conquers all the things living

*End*
Right now i have a few more but unfortunately I don't have the rest of them which I wish that i did. So please feel free to respond and give your remarks.:)

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Old 07-24-2008, 08:51 AM

They're very nice =) hope to read more sometime.

Mind if I ask what kind of poetry a tanka is? I haven't heard of them before.

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Old 07-24-2008, 09:20 AM

No one has EVER heard of a Tanka? I'm going mad, I must be. A tanka is an old form of Japanese poetry that I think began during the Han Dynasty. Tankas are written with five lines unlike a Haiku which is three. A tanka usually has 31 syllables or sometimes more, but sometimes it's not about the syllables it's about how you write the tanka. For example you could be more concerned about the way you spoke metaphorically rather than worrying about the five lines and 31 syllables. Anyways, a lot of people now and days write a lot of these. So it is a rather popular form of poetry in so places.

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Old 07-24-2008, 02:11 PM

Oh... cool =) *fails as a Japan fan* I look forward to reading more of them ^_^

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Old 07-24-2008, 09:26 PM

i like em

good job

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Old 07-24-2008, 09:29 PM

thank you, I had others but it looks like these will have to be my foundation for the new ones. :( It's depressing really.

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Old 07-24-2008, 09:48 PM

It's sad.:(

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Old 07-24-2008, 09:51 PM

what's sad? I don't get it. Explain to me talk to me.

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Old 07-26-2008, 08:38 AM

I think they meant the poems are sad. Like about sad things.

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Old 10-30-2008, 06:16 PM

Hey I know I haven't done this in awhile but I'm about to change the Tankas, I've got a better form of poetry. It's sort of like poetry but it's not so i'll give you a sample and see what you think.

(will write please be patient)

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Old 11-08-2008, 10:27 AM

You have your definition of Tanka a little off. Tankas go in the following form: 5-7-5/7-7. Of course, due to poetic license, you never have to follow form exactly (Unless you are writing something like a Haiku.)

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Old 11-12-2008, 12:46 PM

thanks Justin, I learned this in English class, but my teacher said the form doesn't matter. Anyways, I have the other ones. I'll give you an example, and see what you guys think.

His heart. black. bottomless. like hell. The heart of a thousand screams. Cruel. contagious. EVIL. Cold to the depths of his soul will you find hell. A lie, a single lie to ruin the hearts of those around him. A thousand screams, begging him to stop. A heart. kind. gentle. shatters into an oblivion down hid soul. laughter cuts into a gurgle. a pool of blood. the assasin has her revenge. death in his own blood. his bottomless soul no longer there. her ehart fixed into the kind gentle person she is. Alas her heart has yet time to heal, before she is shattered again... ~09-22-08~


This one was plain random, didn't really have anything for this one.

a pile of books, to soak up knowledge. to know all would be... thrilling. ecstatic. just to know all the information of the world. without a care in the world. without a care for reality. just to soak up the gooey tenderness of all that knowledge. sweet. exciting. toxic are words of pages people don't yet understand. to understand and acknowledge everything you do is to be lifted on a book to the skies of knowledge where everything exsists. to have knowledge... ~09-22-08~

These are my examples of a different type of poetry. I'm not sure what this is but if maybe someone could direct me to another place of if right here is okay that would be nice. Thanks!!

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Old 11-30-2008, 06:45 AM

That seems like Free Verse to me. I'm probably wrong, though.

 


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