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Old 12-08-2008, 08:45 PM

I wrote a ton of these forever and a day ago and just decided to post them on the net to see what people thought of them. I'll be reserving a few spaces because I plan on actually posting the link here and then actually posting the ones i'm proudest of in the thread itself. So... wish me luck.

http://www.angelfire.com/anime5/chii...try/index.html

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Old 12-08-2008, 08:46 PM

« I Believed in You and Me »

We laughed and smiled,
We had love like a child’s.
It seemed like we danced across the sea,
I believed in you and me.

We played and lied,
And sometimes cried.
We had hearts as light as could be,
I believed in you and me.

Then I told you how I cared for you,
And you told me that we’re through.
I just wanted you to see,
That I believed in you and me.

Often now I say goodbye,
Though it makes me want to cry.
Now I’ve locked my heart and thrown away the key,
But I still believe in you and me.


« Because you Promised »

Across the open plains and into your arms, I see you again.
Not knowing how much I miss you, yet still you hold me tight.
Over the years you've been gone, I've been lonely.
Waiting for you to carry me home where I belong.
Suffering while thinking of what life would've been like, if you hadn't come into it.
Across the valley and through the deep meadow within,
I look for you by daylight, but you're not there.
I look for you by moonlight, but it's hopeless for I can't see you.
I would go away, far away, across the rivers of the world,
And across many oceans, just to reach you.
Thinking about if my heart hadn’t known you first, what would it have known?
I think about what would've happened to me if you weren’t there in my time of need.
I only know one thing and that is that you'll always be there for me because you promised.
And one day you'll understand exactly how much I love you.


« Part with the Tide »

Why don’t they just put an end to all my pain?
They keep fussing and fighting again and again.
All the while I try to ignore it, but I know it’s there,
Sometimes at night I wonder if they really care.

They talk of divorce, and I can hear their voices growing,
The worst part of this is all the while knowing.
Ripping my life apart in two different ways,
Wondering when my family’s gonna fall apart, counting the days.

Funny how life never turns out how you plan it,
My soul dying from rejection, because I’m not fit.
I’m screaming so loud, so why can no one hear me?
Possibly they just chose not to, just leaving me be.

All the while I’m crying inside,
All the time, just dying inside.
These are the feelings I can no longer hide,
So much stress, I just part with the tide.


« Assurance »

You're as addictive as the drugs you use,
Your dark hair soaking in a puddle of booze.
You don't look back on people as they were,
But something keeps you going back to her.

I didn't understand how it could be as perfect as you said,
I imagined her crying inside my head.
She's not unhappy, she's moved on.
Get over it, she's already gone.

I know that she's the one that you adore,
But she doesn't want you anymore.
You made it sound like a lovers dream.
Only, it's not the way you make it seem.

She's confused about you I understand,
Because your ideals were too high for this land.
So you moved away, and she's happy too.
You'll never comprehend what she put you through.

You would always tell me that there wasn't just 'the one',
I think now you said it to keep from being undone.
Because your love for her was so pure and deep,
You wanted assurance so you could sleep.

I want to help you the way you helped me
And maybe, in time, I can make you see,
She's tired of you and doesn't want you anymore,
I'm sorry that she has closed that door.

Last edited by FeyonaSaibre; 12-08-2008 at 08:57 PM.. Reason: adding actual poetry instead of just having space savers ^.^

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Old 12-08-2008, 08:47 PM

« Adultress »

Brand a scarlet letter upon my breast,
I can hear them calling me adultress.
As surely as the sun sets in the west,
This is the sin I now confess.

It's so hard not to covet when you think he's 'the one'.
Torn by your feelings for him you don't know what to say.
When you feel the strings of your heart being undone,
You can't understand why it has to be this way.

You kissed him, you fool, this is how it always begins,
You've read the story books, you know how it turns out.
It's always the 1st girl that wins,
And the 2nd is left alone with her doubt.

Why do we get all these crazy feelings inside?
What did I do to deserve all this pain?
These secret feelings to you I now confide,
As quick as a torrent of heavy rain.

Failure again, when did I get led astray
From the path that I once knew?
My one true friend is so far away
If she were here, she'd know what to do.

Jealousy, obsession, lust and desire,
I hate all of these feelings inside of me.
If you say I want to hurt them you're a liar.
If you can't understand, just let me be.


« Alone in Love »

Love unsubsiding caresses me gently,
Alone and distraught waiting for you.
Moonlight flittering through the trees softly,
Waiting, just waiting for you to come through.

A soft gentlt breeze blows across my face,
I see you now running through the trees.
Comming to hold me in your warm embrace,
Your breath on my body feels like a summer breeze.

Alone in my love, even though you're right there,
Far from my love, but yet you're still standing there.
Lonely for love, even though deep inside you care,
I should tell you now I have nothing to fear.

Words flowing over me, under me, through me,
Caressing me gently with emotions and song.
Won't you hear this out cry, this plea?
I have been suffering for so very long.

Deep inside my mind, my heart and soul,
I know you are a treasure for all to behold.
Trapped by your smile like a helpless foal,
An endless story that time had repetedly told.

Burned by the flames of passion, that's what I am,
I leave my lover, my life, my man,
Away from everything...I don't give a damn.
I became alone in love so I just ran.


« Carnal Instincts »

You left four days from yesterday.
I've been so lonely since you left.
You never write, you must have something to say.
'Theif of my heart', you've been so deft.

You're gone now, far out of sight.
Now there's no one here to please.
In my heart, it just felt right,
Being your biggest tease.

The days went by so quickly then.
I knew not what I felt.
Even then I knew not when,
The moment I did melt.

Was he right, when your friend said,
That night was just a 'booty call'?
I feel so stupid I wish I was dead
Because I gave you my all.

I didn't want to fall for you,
You were just a friend.
I only hope you'll see me through,
Until the very end.

I have something to say to you,
Something you once told me.
Something that resounds so true.
"Damn those carnal instincts, D."


« Every Part of You »

I wake, a dream within a dream
I saw you once again
I drempt of you once more
And yet I wake to find you gone

The dream is always the same
You come back to me and I cry
You're so tangeable to me
I can feel every part of you

The texture of your clothing
The warmpth of your skin
The smell of your cologne
The darkness of your hair

A faint smile pulls on your lips
When I move my body close to yours
But I know you'll never be mine
You've been hers for a long time

So I caress you in my dreams
Holding you for what little time I have
Realizing that when I wake up
You'll be a hundred miles away

Touch my body, free my soul
I never want to let you go
Hold me now, I'm cryong inside
Because you'll be gone in the morning

Last edited by FeyonaSaibre; 12-08-2008 at 09:00 PM.. Reason: same as above

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Old 12-08-2008, 08:47 PM

« In the Rain »

I'm all alone standing in the rain,
Feeling all out of sorts and in pain.
You're never here when I'm in need,
But I know I must proceed.

Drenched and crying in the rain,
Standing right next to a drain.
I hear waterfalls all around,
I can't hear any other sound.

Suddenly a voice cries out in the distance,
Crying out for help in her resistance.
I can't tell which direction because of the rain,
The crying stops, the child's been slain.

Helplessly in the rain I fade away,
I look around and wonder 'why today?'
I walk back inside where I belong,
And hear the birds start to sing a new song.


« Just Because I Care »

This is all to let you know,
That when you need me, I'll be there.
This is all just to show,
That when I say 'hi', I mean 'I care',

Sometimes I stop and think about you,
When life gets insane, I'll be here.
At times you may scream and not know what to do,
At times you may get sad and shead a tear.

Life chews you up and spits you out,
It tears you in two and spins you around.
But I'll be there, don't you doubt,
I'll be there when life has you on the ground.



« The Judgement »

The time has come,
To reap what I have sewn.
That cold, desolate hour,
Where all deeds will be shown.

The time is now,
The place is here.
I feel so distant,
Even though you’re near.

I start to speak,
Words tumbling out.
I hold my ground,
Expecting you to shout.

The minute that passes,
Seems like an hour.
And as you speak,
I start to cower.

But not for fear,
Of any physical attack.
Only the fear that,
You won’t ever come back.

You make as if to leave,
Did I actually expect you to stay?
And then you tell me,
The reason you don’t go away.

“I made a promise
To always protect you
To serve your desire
As my need, as long
As I still loved you.”

“To protect you from
The slings of arrows
To parry the swords
But I can’t save you from
The knife in your own hands.”

I cried for a long time,
So afraid and alone.
I thought you would spend time away,
Time away from my sins, for me to atone.

And then it happened,
One solitary kiss.
All my fears transformed,
Into a precious moment of bliss.

“But”, you said, “This is the
Last time you’ll hurt me this way.”
I simply nodded my head,
Having nothing more to say.

The love we made that night,
Wasn’t about need, desire or lust.
I will not and cannot forget,
Because it was about honesty and trust.

A promise made from me to you,
That I wouldn’t ever betray you again.
A commitment made to last a lifetime,
To you, my dear lover and friend.


« A Blood Red Collar »

I wake from an unwanted dream,
Sweat pouring out from me.
I feel so scared, I want to scream.
Let me recapture what I still see.

I'm standing in a broken room,
Staring at a blood red collar.
I see a girl as pale as doom,
She sees me and starts to holler.

She screams and cries,
I walk towards this girl, so pale.
She dries her eyes,
Outside, it starts to hail.

She looks so familiar, I wonder why?
She reminds me of someone I once knew.
I look at her, she stops her outcry,
I see her as I used to.

This girl, broken, like the room we're in,
She had challenges in her life.
This girl was pale and very thin,
Hands made to hold a slender knife.

We talked for a bit and started to wonder,
About the object in the room,
She tried it on and then went under,
A spell worse than carnage or doom.

That blood red coller looked so unreal,
As it sparkled on that young girl's throat.
The sky turned into a sirt of silver-teal,
She looked up and started to float.

She floated into the sky above,
Speaking words I couldn't understand.
She just took off, like a dove.
She came back, lighting the land.

There was an evil glimmer in her eye,
And a twisted smile just as wrong.
I knew then that I was soon to die.
What she had summoned was just too strong.

It ripped through galexies on it's way,
Tore the bright sun all apart.
I knew that I'd never see another day,
And so perished every heart.

It destroyed our beautiful planet Earth,
Dissapeared just like before.
For fate has such little mirth,
On those who seek to make such war.

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Old 12-08-2008, 08:48 PM

I like pie <3 And if you like pie too you'll comment! :P

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Old 12-09-2008, 02:31 PM

I'm actually not that fond of pie, but your poems were really good. (:

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Old 12-09-2008, 03:40 PM

Awwwwww! Thanks! It's nice to know when someone else likes them. I'm actually thinking about getting them all typed up and trying to put them in one big volume.

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Old 12-10-2008, 02:06 PM

I think that would be pretty cool. It's always nice to have a collection of your best/favorite works to look at... and possibly get published later on.

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Old 12-10-2008, 07:47 PM

the funny thing about that is that I've already gotten things published before. Sure it was for things like the school newspaper, but I tend to have a knack for writing things that people are willing to publish... I'm either just too ADD to finish them (if they're long stories) or are too shy to take them to a publisist. :sarcasm:

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Old 12-10-2008, 09:22 PM

I enjoy pie. ^-^ Okay, so here's my thought. Your poetry is good as it stands, but it feels a little too restricted by the need to rhyme. Here is my proposal. Discard rhyming altogether in your next poem. Try getting a feel for different forms of poetry. Haiku, cinquain, go out and experiment. I think you will find you will be able to express yourself in many new, exciting ways. This is all, of course, just a suggestion, and you may go about it as you please.

 


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