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Old 01-30-2009, 07:28 PM

Well I have been thinking about writing a story about a girl who in is in the middle of a brake up with a boyfriend of 4 years(braking up because he has resintly changed and is acting funny and doesnt trust her anymore) to find out that the boy she is about to brake up, was never really who he said he was. It runs out that the boy she thought she was going out with is missing and this boy..who he doesnt even know who he is,is in dessperate need of help. The girl say that she will help him if he helps her find her real boyfriend....Im still thinking of other things but that is the basics...what do you think? Anything I can do to make it better or anything I should change?? I need some help so please help me.

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Old 01-31-2009, 12:08 AM

It sounds like a good start to the story. You have two characters and maybe a third. You should work on developing them a little more perhaps?

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Old 02-01-2009, 06:58 AM

I'm confused. Is are they look a likes?

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Old 10-27-2009, 11:32 PM

Sounds very interesting. Have you come up with where the look a like comes from? Is he part of a government conspiracy or secret expirament like cloning?

 


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