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Old 04-19-2009, 09:32 PM

I was fairly bored in class one day and I wrote this. I like it, however I want to know what others think.

The stormy clouds fill the sky,
thunder rolls across the hills,
and disappears into the dark of the night.
The rain begins to fall,
pulsing hard against the ground,
tiny particles breaking apart.
Life begins to grow,
plants changing in the light of the sun,
a pond filled with life.
A creature walks,
slow and proud,
squishing through the mud.
The thunder cracks,
disturbing the silence,
making the creature fly.
Wings flutter,
the water ripples,
and the gentle bird flies to safety.

Knerd
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Old 04-20-2009, 10:40 PM

Hey! I've moved your thread into our Poetry subforum - I think that you'll get some better feedback here. :yes:

 


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