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Devilfern
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07-17-2009, 08:28 PM
Hay guize. Check out my art please, and give me some advice/critiques? I would appreciate it immensely. Plus anyone is free to post their own art here and get a read on it!
Let the viewing....begin~!

This is one of my favorites. I had a lot of fun making it! Done with copics and black Crayola colored pencil on Bristol board, heehee

My favorite dark prince, done in pencil on computer paper

Some random peacock girl done in Micron pen on Bristol Board

A sketch of my World of Warcraft character, done in pencil on computer paper
If you'd like to see more of my art, please go to http://devilfern.deviantart.com Love!
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HamletSpamlet
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07-17-2009, 09:31 PM
Hmm, I have a certain attraction to the second one for some strange reason... ;)
Since the first one is the most complete, that's the one I'll critique. I really love the colors, they're gorgeous. And the shoe flying off = adorable :heart:
The pose is just a little stiff. It's what's called a "flyswatted pose", where the character depicted looks like they've been flattened against the wall. Try and work on making your figure more dynamic in the future.
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Here's a link to a pose tutorial on deviantart; you can see a little ways down two examples of a running pose.
Hope that helps! :D
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Devilfern
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07-17-2009, 11:26 PM
Thanks for the advice! Yeah, poses are always hard for me, but I'm always working to make myself better ^^
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Silverbeam
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07-18-2009, 06:39 PM
1: I love the expression and the detail in it with her change! I agree needs more anatomy references.
2: Eyebrow thing isn't working with him....
3: Arms seem too short or something....
4:Love the detail of her Armour and the nice clean lines...feel like the back of her head is chopped off..needs a bit more skull and brains n stuff.
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Devilfern
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07-18-2009, 07:45 PM
Thanks :) I think the last girl might look like her heads been chopped cuz her hairstyle is a ponytail with a front bump
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Sally Sinema
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07-21-2009, 04:16 AM
Hi Devilfern, I really like your drawings, they are really imaginative and I really like the last one. She has a lot of character in her face.
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cookie_munsta
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07-21-2009, 04:46 PM
there all pretty good but you have to work on the ones with the profile view. (ones that you see from the side). anyways i am jelous of your skills! haha i love them
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Devilfern
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07-21-2009, 07:07 PM
Thanks guys! Hey anyone else want to post their art here? I'd love to see someone else's work1
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07-21-2009, 08:47 PM
I agree with what everyone else has said about the first picture: the pose is too stiff. The shoe flying off is simply adorable though^^''
As for the third picture, it looks as if her right leg's been cut off. Dx
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Devilfern
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07-22-2009, 10:45 PM
Yeah, I started out drawing the first girl as a statue, but I forgot to fix her pose once she came alive x)
For some reason I always have trouble with legs and lower bodies. >( Sooo furstrating! But I think I'm getting better - I'm trying to draw people in more dynamic poses so you can actually see more of their legs!
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07-23-2009, 12:58 PM
I really love the third one. The only problem I see with that one is that the right leg seems to be chopped off at the knee. You could possibly bring it out (with the toes) past her other leg and it would be an improvement to an already great picture!
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kishura
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07-26-2009, 08:44 PM
:O wow you are very creatie :) i love yer art :)
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07-27-2009, 11:50 PM
First of all let me say that I love your art style, particularly in your Hamlet. ^^ I paused in this thread before and I was about to comment before I critiqued, but my class ended so I didnt have time... ^^;;
Um....before I critique... I want to warn you...... I write a lot. ^^ :blush:
Picture One:
I love the style and the concept (plus the hair is gorgeous) but the pose looks a little...weird... >.O Her legs seem to come out at a different angle to the rest of the body (probably because her feet are shown sideways when her body is at a 3/4 angle...) But I love that you're practicing on full body to get experience with it. ^^ I have a huge problem with feet as well; it helps to look at your own feet in a mirror at a variety of angles, or to check out some stock photos on sites like deviantart for pictures of feet. ^^ The woman's left leg looks a bit strange; I cant tell if its supposed to be sideways, or behind her, but I feel like it would look more natural if you took out the line to the left, and instead just shaded her leg from the knee-down a little darker. ^^
Picture Two:
Hamlet's upper body looks a little thin compared to the thickness of his arms. Speaking of his arms, the right side looks a little shorter than the other; the elbow is raised, and it makes the arm look shorter; try tucking the arm in to his side and lengthening the upper arm a bit. The Skull's eyes are also a little awkward; try shortening the far-eye (its right eye) to add a little bit of perspective. Aside from that (as i said before) i love both the concept and the image itself. (his eyes are gorgeous X3) =3 :yes:
Picture 3:
I agree with Chloe on this one; the girl's right leg has been chopped off at the knee! :O I really like how you worked this pose though; its really unique and stylized ^^ The left side of her body looks a little awkward though, particularly her left arm; the armpit, if her shoulder is rased, should raise along with the arm itself; there should be a relatively uniform thickness along the upper arm. If you move the armpit up, it wil also make the arm look longer and more proportional. ^^ The anatomy of her upper body aside from that is great, however her legs look a little disproportionate; try lengthening the thigh a little bit; that way her calf wont look too long compared to the rest of her ^^ Her feet (foot... ^^;; )are also at an awkward angle; i dont think it would be possible to have your feet at that angle with your legs like that, especially since she's tugging on her leg, so try bending the foot back so that it arches (kind of like a ballerina foot, almost! ^^) and it'll look a little more natural~~
Picture 4:
I personally love how you've drawn your WoW character! Not only is she gorgeous, but the detail is amazing. There's little to say about this one, aside from maybe that her neck could be a little longer so that you can see a bit more of it over the collar and the bust doesnt look so stiff like her armor; if you draw more of a neck sinking into the rim of the armor, it looks like theres more of a body underneath, and not so much like her form is the exact same shape as the armor (I'm sorry if it doesnt make sense... just visualize a skin-tight shirt; theres no looseness around the neck because your form fits the top. in armor, the leather is not usually skin tight, so there would be a looseness --albeit a stiff looseness-- around the neck. If you've seen the Lion the Witch and the Wardrobe, its like the White Witch's outfit--only hers is more extreme. Her body has room to move in her collar despite its stiffness. In any case, I'm sorry...ive gone off on a tangent. ^^;; ) AAANYway, aside from the neckline, i LOVE this one; its easily my favorite (aside from the cute sexiness that is Hamlet :grin: )
I really hope you dont take my critique the wrong way; I'm a big art enthusiest and perfectionist, and an artist myself, so I know its hard to read a critique and not take it personally. But just know that I think you're really amazingly talented (especially your eyes and faces; they're so expressive...I could honestly rave about your eyes all day ^^) and that I think that your artwork (with some work on the legs, as you've mentioned. ^^) is really fantastic, and I hope you keep drawing and practicing. ^^ :heart:
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