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Old 08-04-2009, 01:56 PM

Before i post please excuse any miss spellings or crappy grammar i have some sort of learning disability.




The rise and fall of stan.


Stan was just your typical peasant living under the cruel king of his country. He was one of the poorist of them all. One day thanx to the beatings and cruel manners of the king he put together a fighting force getting ready to attack the king while he is transported to an agreement to a war game. It was along battle because the king brought 50 of his best guards but the villagers over powered them because of the shear number of them. But stan was the one to pierce the kings heart and in this country thou who shall kill the king will become the king. Stan was a kind person nomore the pressure of the country had gotten to him and the people started to rebel against him.


i know its boring and short.

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Old 08-06-2009, 04:34 AM

I think that that would make a great story, if you were to add more detail and draw out the story line. I see great potential in your writing! :D

 


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