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Old 09-21-2009, 01:26 AM

Blackness Inside
Cold and black is my heart
All thats left is an ice cold stare
All the tears i had are now dried up
The blood in my veins flowing black
Ice cold to the touch
The living dead is what I am
What once drove me on is now killing me
What once saved me now is condemning me
A blackness is taking over
And theres no saving me now

Please tell me honestly what you think of this, I can take any criticism that you have and any advice that you have and I will take it to heart

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Old 09-21-2009, 01:53 AM

/standing applause. Can i borrow your creativity for creative writing please?!!?!

I really like it. Do you have any more?

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Old 09-21-2009, 02:06 AM

I have more on my gaia account, 'cept they are all on the depressing side. You can use it if you like

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Old 09-21-2009, 02:10 AM

Through those tired eyes you see the world crumbling
With the worn hands you hold yourself
Not feeling safe anywhere but within your own arms
The sky burns red from the fires in the city
Black smoke rising all around your glass sanctuary
As you stand before the vast burning city before you
You shed a single tear
All this power and triumph
And not a single soul to share it with
Great general of war
You are alone in this world
This world you have turned to ashes
The world you turned to hell

I need help titling this, my creativity kinda ran dry when I got to the title. Any help will be appreciated

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Old 09-21-2009, 06:37 PM

Less_Than_Forgotten, I've merged your two threads and moved them into our Poetry subforum. From now on, please update this thread with all of your new pieces. Each user is only allowed to have one Poetry topic. :yes:

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Old 09-21-2009, 07:37 PM

Thank you, I'm still really new to this

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Old 09-21-2009, 11:59 PM

Very good, like always, Megankins.

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Old 09-22-2009, 12:11 AM

Thank you Sera

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Old 09-22-2009, 03:22 AM

Your welcome ^-^

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Old 09-22-2009, 03:54 AM

whats with the dog?

 



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