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Originally Posted by Izzyosaur
2. The wheel would be that of Time. By willing the wheel to ever spin I mean to imply that time goes on without the character--or at least that is what is wished for.
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I figured that's what you meant, but the "willing the wheel" just sounds awkward, like it's forced. I think in this case what the narrator is trying to express is a type of control, so wouldn't it make sense to, instead, then have these two lines:
"Swaying to the chime in the winds
Grasping the wheel that forever spins."
I think that flows a lot more smoothly and holds a stronger power.
As for the "fear" uh--I can't help you out too much on that, sorry.