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Old 02-22-2010, 10:43 PM

Hey everyone. :) I'm going to be sharing some poems that I've written. So, I hope you like them. :) [Btw, each poem will be separated with a line "____"].

So blissful, so gorgeous, so graceful.
Like the ocean blue.
Let the truth be told,
I want to be with you.
Forever and ever till the day I die,
I will love you always and will never lie.
And I hope you’ll do the same as I’ll do for you,
Because everyday I feel like crying because of you.
How could something so blissful, so gorgeous, so graceful cause pain?
Because love is love and is just a game.
__________________________________________________ ____

I think about you night and day
I can't stand being away
When I look deep into your eyes
I catch a glimpse of Heaven deep inside
And I know this poem's kind of cheesey
But to love you is just so easy.
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As I lay here in bed gazing at my ceiling,
My mind is racing, and I’m barely breathing.
But I’m still not sure if to say it or not.
I really like you, but you don’t want what I’ve got.
I’m taking a chance and it’s not very easy,
All I wanted to say was I love you,
I’m giving it a shot.
__________________________________________________ ____

Day and night
Locks and keys
They go together,
Like you and me.
__________________________________________________ ____

[This one I wrote for my friend Amanda who is extremely loud and tonedef and tends to fall when she laughs]. XD

Tone def is loud
Amanda is proud
She is not as quiet as a cloud
Sure she may be tone def, but that's okay
Because when she laughs, on the floor she lays




That's it so far. :)

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Old 02-23-2010, 03:16 PM

If you ever want any feedback on poetry, let me know! My major is creative writing! :D These are all very cute and spirited pieces. ;)

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Old 02-24-2010, 05:14 PM

For the last one, I thought you would like this more, I edited it.

Quote:
Not a quiet cloud,
Tone def is loud.
Amanda is proud,
---Tone def, but that's okay.
On the floor laughing,
Amanda is proud.
I don't know if that's your style, that's what I'd do with that.

Last edited by Ryokushin; 02-24-2010 at 05:16 PM.. Reason: forgot a comma

 



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