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Old 03-21-2010, 12:51 PM

Hello, I would like to have some comments about my poem.

FROM MY HEAVEN

Here now that everything is silent
and the calmness kisses my blue heart
goodbye I say to you my love
the reason is that the time has come
for you to walk without me
there's so much to live for

Don't cry my darling
you have to fall in love again
I'd love to see your smile once more

But my dear darling
forgetting you it's impossible
and only time knows
all your pain because you loved me
there is a lot of words
that I didn't tell you alive
you are everything I love
and now that I'm not at your side
I will look after you

(IT WILL CONTINUE)

Whisper Invictus
is in your head.

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Old 03-21-2010, 08:15 PM

Nice. I like it :) If you want to jump in on my Neverending Poem, I'd love some more inspiration from fellow writers :hug:

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Old 03-22-2010, 01:49 AM

Hey, just to let you know, there is a subforum just for poetry. You're post will probably get moved there.

Welcome to Menewsha, and welcome to the Literature forum, but may I suggest looking through the other forums and reading some guidelines? Feel free to PM me if you have any questions or problems. =)

 


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