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Old 05-18-2010, 04:40 PM

I had an idea for an introduction for a scifi novel. There's so many things that this intro could lead to, so I thought maybe I'd post it here and get other people's ideas. I ask you to please not take my work as your own, but feel free to send people to this forum. Tell me what you think.
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It was 12 past midnight on december 12th in Las Vegas, Nv. Tourists were gambling, drinking, and partying. Locals were working, drinking, gambling, and sleeping. Christmas was only a couple weeks away. Until that moment, it was a just another night in Las Vegas. All of a sudden, every electronic device turned off, and a low rumbling was heard, like the growl of a large animal. The sound seemed as if it came from nowhere, yet everwhere, all at once. Then there was a flash of light, and every living thing in the city was gone. Not a single person, animal, or any formof organic material was left. Yet every non-living substance was still there. The slot machines, poker tables, even the very clothes on peoples backs were left. In a matter of moments, sin city became a ghost town.
It was 12 past midnight in the small town of kingman, Az. The town was asleep, the only lights being the streetlamps and the glow from gas stations and walmart. Until that momentit was just a normal night in the small town. All of a sudden, every electronic device was shut down, there was a low rumbling, and a flash of light. Not a single person, plant or animal was left, yet every non-living substance was untouched. In just a matter of moments, the city became a ghost town.
It was 12 past midnight in NYC. Tourists were going back to their hotels, just coming back from seeing a show, or having dinner, or just enjoying a nice vacation. Locals were sleeping, or working. Until that moment, it was just a normal day in NYC. All of a sudden, every electronic device shut down, there was a low rumbling, and a flash of light. Not a single person, plant, or animal was left, yet every non-living substance was exactly how it had been moments before. In just a matter of moments, NYC had become a ghost town.

Hong kong, Tokyo, London, Moscow, and in many many other cities the same thing happened, a low rumbling, a flash of light, and all organic matter destroyed. Every town with a population higher than 500 was hit, destroying most of the human population.

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Old 05-18-2010, 04:47 PM

Hum...

I feel like it's so obvious of a thing to do and yet I can't recall any books I have read that have. It does seem to be a Crichton set up.

I think if you do decide to run with this, read some Crichton books (Timeline and Prey are my favorites) and you will see what I am talking about.

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By the way, I also LOVE the pic in your sig. Where did you get it?

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Old 05-19-2010, 05:08 PM

Sound great! I love the idea, something I can really see happening.

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Old 05-20-2010, 07:33 PM

I'll be sure to check those books out. and I got that pic from photobucket, I was looking for a pic for an rp and I came across this pic, and of course I saved it to my pc.

The way I came up with this, is I had a dream of this happening, and I woke up and wrote it down. (except there wasn't a date/time in my dream, I added that) and I told a friend of mine about it, and he said it sounded almost like a neutron bomb. So I thought maybe an accidental launch or something, then I added the date, and now there's all kinds of ideas. anything from the illuminati, to aliens, to accidental missle launch, and more. I'm not entirely sure where to take it from here. any ideas?

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Old 06-25-2010, 06:48 PM

All of a sudden, every electronic device turned off,

A lot of people write all of a sudden and yeah it's convenient to write but, this is just a suggestion, instead of writing all of a sudden you could write i was sitting, looking at the full house in my hands when the lights started to flicker. after a few minutes of the lights flickering they turned off, it looked like the power had gone out. i check my cell phone and saw that it to was dead. you know, it stead of writing all of a sudden, write in detail what happens and maybe why the character thinks it happens like oh must be the storm or something. it's the same with your second paragraph, you should describe it going off instead of saying all of a sudden. it is a great idea but the question is if every one, person and animal is gone then how is the story going to go along? how will there be characters?

I just thought of something you could do, Robots lo i know its been done, it's just an idea. or you can have crazsy people, like those people who thinks it's the end of the world, been hiding out in a protected area and when every one is gone they come out of hiding and see that they are the only people left and like some form of outer space life has all the humans trapped as slaves and it's up to the humans that were hiding out to save the human race

 


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