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06-30-2010, 01:46 AM
Lephixia's Poetry Corner ~
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Your tears - they are salty - the cuts - they are deep - for your emotions are battered - for the secrets they keep.
The truth might just save you - from the fires of hell - but the scars on your heart - you know all to well.
The people you trusted - with the dark of your heart - laughed in your face - and tore you apart.
The world - she is cruel - no fair mistress is she - so the darkness you have - stays hidden beneath.
Your complection is perfect - your smile is fine - but your eyes do not sparkle - like sparkling wine.
For you see the hate - that nothing is fine - you know all too well - the lessons of life.
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The love of a heart so tender indeed,
that each person desires its magic healing,
to share your love is to share your heart,
it is the essence of life - less it falls apart.
Though your love may fail - your heart will not break,
for the strength that you wield shall commemorate,
the courage it took to give out your heart -
was the courage they wanted,
to make their own start.
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Computer, I love you.
For all that you do,
letting me know what others may do,
You let me just talk,
vent and just cry,
and don't say a word - you don't say good bye.
I thank you for listening
to all of my tears,
for the bad times were rough
but you persevered
I just want to say,
how much you mean,
thank you computer
It means a lot to me.
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Anyways - I think it would be nice to have a discussion or some criticism.
I also would Like to continue updating this thread with poetry I may write in the future.
Last edited by Lephixia; 06-30-2010 at 02:44 AM..
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Sezumie
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06-30-2010, 02:22 AM
that, to be honest is pretty good. Better than i'll ever do, my place of talent is art, more of anime-ish, but i can do other types of art if i tried :P but i noticed that it's more angsty or lovey dovey, try varying your poetry~~
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Lephixia
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06-30-2010, 02:23 AM
Haha Will do ^.^ I just need that inspiration I get all random like.... its why I carry paper and some kind of writing Utensil EVERYWHERE.... or I just do it in the notes section my phone has >.> haha
But thanks for the opinions <3
You should submit some art - I will if you do xD lol
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Sezumie
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06-30-2010, 02:26 AM
i do put in some art, im still too shy to actually show people though.....
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Lephixia
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06-30-2010, 02:28 AM
Well I shared my poetry - which is like - all from the heart =D
So you can post your art right? I know you can ^.^
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Sezumie
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06-30-2010, 02:30 AM
post where? i have a few in a blog entry i did when i first joined menewsha if that's what you mean....ehehe, i only learned how to draw like that last year~
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06-30-2010, 02:31 AM
haha ya..I'm more into the drawing side of art, too. Buttt....I like the rhythm in the first one. =] And the second one's got a nice feel to it. I agree that maybe some variety would be cool, too. There's a lot of angsty and/or lovey poetry out there. You can try just writing a poem about something you see if you're low on inspiration. I read a great one about plants, and I think there was one about a wheelbarrow, too, last semester in my Lit Class. Actually..there was one that was basically a note that said "Hey, I ate your food...just so's ya now" haha
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Lephixia
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06-30-2010, 02:43 AM
HAHAHA! I will have to try that.... maybe for my computer? lmao
Computer, I love you.
For all that you do,
letting me know what others may do,
You let me just talk,
vent and just cry,
and don't say a word - you don't say good bye.
I thank you for listening
to all of my tears,
for the bad times were rough
but you persevered
I just want to say,
how much you mean,
thank you computer
It means a lot to me.
Yup.... made it up on the spot xD lmfao
Its not bad if you ask me =P
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Sezumie
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06-30-2010, 02:52 AM
xD epic, that made my day~
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Katie Scarlett Divine
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06-30-2010, 02:53 AM
love them ! <3
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Lephixia
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06-30-2010, 02:54 AM
Thank you Katie ^.^ It means a lot to me =D
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Katie Scarlett Divine
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06-30-2010, 03:14 AM
welcome buddy! x3
-conquers page-
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Lephixia
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06-30-2010, 03:16 AM
More page conquering? Oh - did your friend reply to my PM yet? Ask her please? =D
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