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Old 09-26-2010, 04:30 PM

The spiraling confusion in my mind
All the things Ive chose to leave behind
Most of them haunt me, only some are gone
Not sleeping, just thinking, Im up at dawn
I wonder if I will ever figure things out
I think to myself, "of course!", but in my mind there is some doubt
I let the tears run free down my face
I turn my head, and hope they dont show a trace
I want to tell all the things that are wrong
But all these things, Ive kept them in for so long
So i turn my head and wipe my eyes
I try to forget all the lies
As I walk away, I get a thought and I pause
Im done with you and all the trouble you cause

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Old 10-05-2010, 03:55 AM

I love the rhyme scheme, also, I feel that I can closely relate to this. Though I'm not sure your original inspiration, or idea, poetry can be interpreted in many ways. I say that this poem in my list comes right after Edgar Allen Poe and Robert Frost...I think I'm in love with your poem.

But seriously, really good poem. You've got a lot of potential

 


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