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#501
Old 11-09-2013, 08:05 PM

For a love poem it's pretty good. ^^

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#502
Old 11-09-2013, 08:33 PM

so you like it?

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#503
Old 11-09-2013, 08:42 PM

I'd say yes ^^
The focus of the poem is very simple, but simple works well with it at that length.

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#504
Old 11-09-2013, 10:25 PM

i wrote this one nearly 2 years after loosing my best friend

Aysel

I miss you dearly
It’s almost two years
Two years ago you dead
I still miss you everyday
I lost my best friend
My sister was what you called me
I miss talking to you
Telling you what’s on my mind
What I feel
I miss you so much
After two years I still think about you
And every time I think about you
You are here
Here with me
In my mind
In spirit
Forever

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#505
Old 11-10-2013, 01:48 AM

^^ nice. Only thing, change Dead to Died perhaps? Seems grammatically off a little bit.

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#506
Old 11-10-2013, 06:52 AM

aww,i'm sorry Desi I'm here now

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#507
Old 11-10-2013, 11:13 AM

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^^ nice. Only thing, change Dead to Died perhaps? Seems grammatically off a little bit.
oops that is sepost to be died yes

my english is not that great haha

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#508
Old 11-10-2013, 12:27 PM

soooo.................... *eats candy all alone*

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#509
Old 11-10-2013, 12:36 PM

did someone say candy?
i love candy

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#510
Old 11-10-2013, 12:52 PM

*offers desi some candy*

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#511
Old 11-10-2013, 01:42 PM

yeay candy *takes same and huggles with it*

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aww you left while i was eating some lunch :(

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#512
Old 11-10-2013, 02:08 PM

aww,i'm still here lol how's your day?

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#513
Old 11-10-2013, 02:11 PM

its ok, quiet but ok haha

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and yours?

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#514
Old 11-10-2013, 02:19 PM

i'm off work today so pretty good,lol

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#515
Old 11-10-2013, 02:24 PM

so we get more techi today?

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or less if you dont even answer haha

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#516
Old 11-10-2013, 08:12 PM

Quite alright Desi. ^^
Just figured if you plan to make a book, something like that would be good for me to mention.

I want candy too

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#517
Old 11-10-2013, 10:27 PM

The Wandering Poet: yes i am working it out
putting one together with both my dutch and english poems

it might be very risky putting it together, a poet that did get his published said i should play it safe and only use my dutch ones but that means i am not even close to having enough poems for a book
plus i write both dutch and english, why should that stop me from making a mixed book, the netherlands teaches english at school from a very early age, throughout every school time you get, so thats years and years of english learning. so why shouldnt i put them in 1 book together right

i want to be risky and send it in as a 2 languages poetry book

and typing this i got a wonderfull name for the cover

in dutch: woorden met gevoel
in english: words with feeling

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#518
Old 11-10-2013, 11:07 PM

Oh that's a nice title ^^

It would make for a good book for a poetry class at the least. That way they would be discussing english and dutch poetry.

Personally, if the country is bilingual, I see a very small risk.

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#519
Old 11-10-2013, 11:26 PM

what does bilingual mean?

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Old 11-10-2013, 11:47 PM

Bi (2) Lingual (language)
That's a rough translation though.

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#521
Old 11-10-2013, 11:50 PM

well english is a language our schools give, you cant drop it like the other languages like french and german
so i guess we must be

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not that i will be good enough but atleast someone reads it and maybe think diffrently then me?

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btw i was re-reading posts and well what exactly did you mean with
i kinda think what it means but i might be wrong so i though i will just ask

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Just figured if you plan to make a book, something like that would be good for me to mention.

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#522
Old 11-11-2013, 02:15 AM

Sorry Desi been catching up on sleep today....or trying to anyways

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#523
Old 11-11-2013, 04:13 AM

Just saying that if there's a typo of sorts in English it would be good for me to mention to help you out.

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#524
Old 11-11-2013, 10:40 AM

that would be awesome, but there alot of poems haha

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#525
Old 11-12-2013, 01:20 AM

^^ Well you've been posting them here and there, so if I end up seeing one it's the least I can do for a fellow menewshan.

 


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