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Old 11-12-2013, 02:10 PM

i will just pm them one by one untill all of them are done
but you might see some you already read but reading them again would be better for the grammar, since my grammar sucks

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Old 11-12-2013, 10:48 PM

That's alright. ^^
I'll give what feedback I can. I mostly will just mention things that feel off compared to the rest. As a poet you're allowed to warp grammar a little. Sort of a "creative freedom" so long as it works :D

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Old 11-12-2013, 10:52 PM

that i didnt know

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Old 11-12-2013, 10:55 PM

I made a poem once that has almost no actual words in it.
Dr. Seuss is a good example of being able to make up whatever you want.

The key part of a poem is usually how it flows, but it really depends how you want your reader to feel.
I wrote a poem once that, the grammar and spelling slowly got worse and worse until it wasn't even legible anymore

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Old 11-12-2013, 11:06 PM

that would be hell for a grammar nut

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Old 11-12-2013, 11:09 PM

Yup. It was written in order to irritate any grammar nazis XD

I would never publish a piece like that though... I would be the most hated modern poet in the world if I did.

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Old 11-12-2013, 11:11 PM

haha but if its only one time, it might be interesting as a piece

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Old 11-12-2013, 11:12 PM

True. I might remake it at some point. I wrote it to a friend over skype while I waited for them to reply so I didn't keep it.

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Old 11-12-2013, 11:15 PM

i kept everything i wrote, but some might got lost cuz i did have some bad computers in my writing times. alot of my music got lost, so probebly some of my poems too but not alot of them i guess

since i do have a book with now 65 poems in it

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Old 11-12-2013, 11:19 PM

I've written hundreds, but when I find I dislike a poem I throw it away. Usually for those poems I keep a couple lines and toss the rest.

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Old 11-12-2013, 11:20 PM

i learned that even if i dont think its good enough, others find it amassing and good and what not more
so i tent not to through everything out, knowing myself if i did that there would be non left

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Old 11-12-2013, 11:32 PM

I've spent a long time writing a lot of these poems, years and years refining some of them.
But I rarely can find anyone who will give actual advice. Everyone always says "Oh this is amazing", even though it's only a mediocre piece.

Even my poetry teacher back in college couldn't properly critique my writing. He was too busy pulling metaphors out of a concrete poem.

Oh by the way, if I give really simple advice, it's because it's already pretty good. I just want to give what advice I can even if it's small ^^ that first one was pretty good though.

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Old 11-12-2013, 11:33 PM

i dont think i am the right girl for that either

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Old 11-12-2013, 11:37 PM

Haha, I doubt there is anyone who would be right for it. I over complicate poetry XD

I sometimes start breaking into math and logic to get the poem right >.<

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Old 11-12-2013, 11:42 PM

ok i am definitly not the right one then
math not my stongest point, and logic maybe but i am not sure if it would be in english haha

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Old 11-12-2013, 11:56 PM

Logic isn't really english. It's just using equations to figure out if something is logical or not. Much easier than math cause there's no numbers.

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Old 11-13-2013, 12:03 AM

i ment more, since english is only a 2nd language i learned at school, thinking logical in english might be a problem for me

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Old 11-13-2013, 12:18 AM

Well logic is very non-language based.
it's mostly just the use of symbols to explain stuff. I'm a bit too rusty to explain it though

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Old 11-13-2013, 12:19 AM

its ok hanging out with you and i might catch on to it haha

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#545
Old 11-13-2013, 12:53 AM

^^ Alrighty.

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#546
Old 11-13-2013, 01:00 AM

*yawns* I am here finally

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#547
Old 11-13-2013, 01:00 AM

where have you been?

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ok time for me to go to bed
its pretty late allready
sleep well for later and bye bye sweeties

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Old 11-13-2013, 01:23 AM

just been busy and tired with work :( awww bye bye Desi

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Old 11-13-2013, 10:37 AM

good morning all

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Old 11-13-2013, 05:57 PM

Good morning ^^

 


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