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11-12-2013, 02:10 PM
i will just pm them one by one untill all of them are done
but you might see some you already read but reading them again would be better for the grammar, since my grammar sucks
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11-12-2013, 10:48 PM
That's alright. ^^
I'll give what feedback I can. I mostly will just mention things that feel off compared to the rest. As a poet you're allowed to warp grammar a little. Sort of a "creative freedom" so long as it works :D
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11-12-2013, 10:52 PM
that i didnt know
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11-12-2013, 10:55 PM
I made a poem once that has almost no actual words in it.
Dr. Seuss is a good example of being able to make up whatever you want.
The key part of a poem is usually how it flows, but it really depends how you want your reader to feel.
I wrote a poem once that, the grammar and spelling slowly got worse and worse until it wasn't even legible anymore
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11-12-2013, 11:06 PM
that would be hell for a grammar nut
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11-12-2013, 11:09 PM
Yup. It was written in order to irritate any grammar nazis XD
I would never publish a piece like that though... I would be the most hated modern poet in the world if I did.
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11-12-2013, 11:11 PM
haha but if its only one time, it might be interesting as a piece
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11-12-2013, 11:12 PM
True. I might remake it at some point. I wrote it to a friend over skype while I waited for them to reply so I didn't keep it.
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11-12-2013, 11:15 PM
i kept everything i wrote, but some might got lost cuz i did have some bad computers in my writing times. alot of my music got lost, so probebly some of my poems too but not alot of them i guess
since i do have a book with now 65 poems in it
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11-12-2013, 11:19 PM
I've written hundreds, but when I find I dislike a poem I throw it away. Usually for those poems I keep a couple lines and toss the rest.
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11-12-2013, 11:20 PM
i learned that even if i dont think its good enough, others find it amassing and good and what not more
so i tent not to through everything out, knowing myself if i did that there would be non left
Last edited by LadyDesi; 11-12-2013 at 11:26 PM..
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11-12-2013, 11:32 PM
I've spent a long time writing a lot of these poems, years and years refining some of them.
But I rarely can find anyone who will give actual advice. Everyone always says "Oh this is amazing", even though it's only a mediocre piece.
Even my poetry teacher back in college couldn't properly critique my writing. He was too busy pulling metaphors out of a concrete poem.
Oh by the way, if I give really simple advice, it's because it's already pretty good. I just want to give what advice I can even if it's small ^^ that first one was pretty good though.
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11-12-2013, 11:33 PM
i dont think i am the right girl for that either
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11-12-2013, 11:37 PM
Haha, I doubt there is anyone who would be right for it. I over complicate poetry XD
I sometimes start breaking into math and logic to get the poem right >.<
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11-12-2013, 11:42 PM
ok i am definitly not the right one then
math not my stongest point, and logic maybe but i am not sure if it would be in english haha
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11-12-2013, 11:56 PM
Logic isn't really english. It's just using equations to figure out if something is logical or not. Much easier than math cause there's no numbers.
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11-13-2013, 12:03 AM
i ment more, since english is only a 2nd language i learned at school, thinking logical in english might be a problem for me
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11-13-2013, 12:18 AM
Well logic is very non-language based.
it's mostly just the use of symbols to explain stuff. I'm a bit too rusty to explain it though
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11-13-2013, 12:19 AM
its ok hanging out with you and i might catch on to it haha
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11-13-2013, 12:53 AM
^^ Alrighty.
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11-13-2013, 01:00 AM
*yawns* I am here finally
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11-13-2013, 01:00 AM
where have you been?
---------- Post added 11-13-2013 at 02:09 AM ----------
ok time for me to go to bed
its pretty late allready
sleep well for later and bye bye sweeties
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11-13-2013, 01:23 AM
just been busy and tired with work :( awww bye bye Desi
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11-13-2013, 10:37 AM
good morning all
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11-13-2013, 05:57 PM
Good morning ^^
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