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Old 04-17-2007, 11:14 PM

2115
It is the year 2115. There are no civil wars, which barbarically tear nations apart. There is no murder; the desolation of lives is no longer rampant. There is no nuclear waste, that which poisons Mother Nature so maliciously. There is no air pollution to harm any being. There is no child abuse, that which strains all future relations between generations. There is no hate to throw beings asunder. There is no starvation, which degrades the body and soul to the point of demise. There is no sexism; no ripping apart of the connections between one being and the next. There are no wars between nations, severing diplomatic ties as though they were the petals of a child’s love-me, love-me-not daisy. There is no climate change that warms the ice caps, drowning countless beings in the ice’s hurried race to defrost. There is no racism, that which muddies connections between one and another. There is no illiteracy; no handicaps for an extraordinary life. There is no water pollution to sicken those that endeavor to satiate their thirst. There is no disease that annihilates any attempt to live a life without impairment. There is no discrimination, that which isolates those who should have been mutual companions. There is no fighting, which breaks apart that which should have been whole. There is no drug abuse; no gripping, icy hands of addiction attempting to smother any signs of resistance.

No, the human race’s campaign of destruction has been done away with. There is no mark upon the Earth any longer to show there ever existed such a horrendous, deplorable, even repulsive race, save for the crumbling shells of buildings where humans once lived. All that continues to draw breath on the planet once known as Earth are those organisms which survived the drawn-out onslaught of the humans. The beings coexist in harmony as Mother Nature intended, now that their captors and desecrators have vanished. Where did this race disappear to? Only the spirits which comprise Mother Nature herself know; however, to divulge such a secret, to them, would be akin to murdering everything they have strived for, for it could mean the recrudescence of the beasts which had unsealed the box of malevolence, releasing forces that would bring havoc to the natural order of the world. It is the year 2115, and there is peace.

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So will you give me suggestions on how to improve it, and ideas about how to continue it? I also have another, similarly themed short story I can post if you guys want. <3

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Old 04-20-2007, 01:35 AM

Pretty good :) It tells the basic structure.

 


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