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Old 04-19-2007, 03:59 AM

Ok, first of all, this is oooold. oo; <333
I wrote it a few years ago, but I've always had a soft spot for it. <33
  • I cry
    at night when no one can see me.
    My tears
    Like crystal in a black lit sky
    show my feelings,
    But no one can see me
    I cry
    at night when no one can hear me.
    My screams
    echoing through the empty night
    lie still in the midnight air,
    But no one can hear me.
    I cry
    at night when no one can help me.
    My emotions
    jumbled together show
    hatred, joy, grief... love
    But no one can help me.
    I cry
    at night when I miss you the most.

I realise most people won't like it, but I do. XD;;

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Old 04-19-2007, 08:42 PM

Are u kidding me?
I loved that poem!!!!
Ur really good at writing them
Even tho I shouldn't be judging b.c of only one work..
but still..
continue?
Did u write it when u were sad?

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Old 04-19-2007, 10:16 PM


I really enjoyed that poem. It was very lyrical sounding and flowed nicely. The words chosen really bring the poem to life.

Great job!

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Old 04-20-2007, 02:59 AM

I really enjoyed that. That pain was more than evident but not to overstated. Sorry if that sounds a little vague or like an oxymoron but i don't really know of any other way to put it.

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Old 04-22-2007, 02:35 AM

There was a lot of imagery in it. I think it was really good.

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Old 04-22-2007, 09:06 PM

I loved it a lot. Very soft words you used--to me at least -sweatdrop-
You should keep on posting more. ;D

 


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