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Old 05-04-2007, 12:37 AM

Birth, come with nothing.
A simple pleasure, momentarily.
A brief wish, coming any day.
Live happily, for a while.
Do what you want, eventually.
Find yourself, if you're lucky.
Enlightenment, count your merits.
Love, at least once.
Selfless, may fortunes come to you.
Everlasting memories, happened.
Make dreams, 'cause you need them.
Seek reality, when dreams vanished.
Seek God, when it hurts.
Lost, without believing.
Frustration, without guidance.
Headaches, never leaves completely.
Living, pretend it's worthwhile.
Dying, welcome home.

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Something I wrote one day. Dunno what the title is. :D
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The Things I say.
(This one has a title. xD lol.)

In a moment of anger
You find me speak the language of a stranger
In a moment of happiness
Words become gibberish more or less
In a moment of depression
There's no hope and no more passion
In a moment of attention
There's no language, no communication
In a moment of catching one's eyes
Words turn to left from right

In these moments of emotions
They're nonetheless nonsense with one exception
The stage of tranquility and peace
Those words won't bent or grease

Little time do I find myself
Speaks the beliefs in my inner shell
Always miscommunication and misplace
The right words, and the right face
Take a moment and look at the things I say
Take as much as long as you may
Keep in mind my words are straight
Only half of my truth hides from what I say

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Old 05-05-2007, 09:18 AM

xD In all honestly, I didn't get the first poem. It made sense to me then it didn't and then it did. xD It's not so rhyme-y that one. xD

In a moment of catching one's eyes
Words turn to left from right


And this one from your second poem doesn't rhyme. xD Throws off the constant rhyme you had through out the second poem. *nods*

But other then that, it looks good. ^^

 


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