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Old 05-18-2007, 05:11 PM

The Fog

Her silver hair
Twines round
Ancient trees
Her wispy dress
Spread ‘cross
Her delicate form
Her chilled fingers
Wrap the long forsaken moor
Cradling it
Like a child cradles a
Favorite teddy bear
The river bank her pillow
The clouds her silken cover
She sleeps
The fog sleeps

All comments and constructive criticism are welcome.

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Old 05-20-2007, 03:11 AM

really good, simple though elegant.

Great job.

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Old 05-20-2007, 07:00 PM

Thanks. I really value any comments I get.

 


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