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Old 06-03-2007, 11:00 PM

She spun around in speeding circles,
The sound of the violins rushing through the room,
She spun, she spun, and spun she did,
being a ballerina is what she did.

Her ankles wanted to give in,
but she did not,
so she had spun,
she spun alot.

At day she danced,
at night she pranced,
but everyone seem to forget one fact:

She could tire.

As she did, she had tired,
tired of dancing,
tired of violins,
tired of swollen ankles,
tired of blood and tears,

but just tired of having to dance every,
single,
night.


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This was something of a sort of skit I did for Dance Class. O3O;

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Old 06-05-2007, 12:11 AM

He played in speeding time,
the strings creating a thing of sort:

It was a violin,
was it not,
it would not have a name to call it by.

The music he play,
no,
the music he created,
he has done for five years long.

Whatching her dance,
from dawn to dusk,
day to night,
bright to dark,
he watched her dance.

A secret crush is all that it could be,
for he was just ment to play per fee,
he played at her concerts,
at her gigs,
at the stores,
at the stage,
at the the brisk,
for nothing more.

A crush he had on the tiering girl,
who danced on at night,
in a frenzy of twirls.

A secret like it was,
her determanation was all it took,
for him just to look.

A secret love it was,
For he dreamed of Violetta,
he dreamed of her returning that secret crush,
that crush,
that secret liking,
that secret love.

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Old 06-10-2007, 05:34 PM

I like it alot. The best thing is that it all makes sence. If i was to try and do something like this, i'd fail miserably.
Good job!"

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Old 06-11-2007, 10:35 PM

Ah, thank you! ^-^

It was originally just the first part, but then when i fell asleep on my keyboard. o3o;

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Old 06-16-2007, 05:07 PM

Its most interesting...does she ever discover him, I wonder? xD

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Old 06-16-2007, 06:40 PM

Fantastic!

You can almost feel the rythm of her heartbeat and motion as you write out the story. I could just visualize the girl dancing and spinning, and could hear the violins.

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Old 06-18-2007, 01:31 AM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Morbidly
Its most interesting...does she ever discover him, I wonder? xD
Haven't wrote it that far yet, but I'll probly will... when,, I don't know, but I know I will when I hear my muusical muse live in the Family Value Tour. o3o;

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Old 06-18-2007, 04:06 AM

I love it. Wonderful work.

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Old 07-03-2007, 10:38 PM

Thank you guys. ^-^

Currently working on part three . . .

 


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