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Celestial
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06-29-2007, 06:43 PM
- Hello, and welcome to my little writing thread. Here I will post up my poems, drabbles, limericks, short stories and more as a practice so I can get used to writing more.
I like constructive criticism but don't be too harsh.
If you have any comments, they are also welcome.
Thank you! ^^
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Celestial
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06-29-2007, 06:47 PM
- Weather Facade
Tears of blue flow down my face
as I ponder about my day.
I rely on a helping hand
to make this sadness go away.
My mind is hazy with thoughts
that flow in and out.
Staring at the window,
waiting for the rain to stop.
The cheery sun soon took over
and a grin decorated my face,
the weather controlling my facade.
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Celestial
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06-29-2007, 06:52 PM
- Who am I?
You can never see me in daytime
but I am here waiting
for the day to end
so I can be seen once again.
When nighttime arrives,
I twinkle in amusement
when I see how the world is living.
I hear a wish from a child
and I know I can't grant it
now I have to wait for the night to end.
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Celestial
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06-29-2007, 07:05 PM
- This is a poem about my old neighborhood. I live in a much better neighborhood now.
Walking Home
Walking back home used to be a daily routine
smelling the sweet scent of bread coming from the store,
when I know that they'll close down in a month.
Buildings covered in yellow like the golden sun
just to have graffiti on the walls one day
only to be repainted the next.
I hear greetings in other languages all the time
just to hear that makes me smile in pride.
Even though I hear the drunk yell late at night,
I'm used to the noise and it won't frighten me at all
but I really hate it when he shouts out "Opa."
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Celestial
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06-29-2007, 07:13 PM
- Finding Hope
Too much time went
since I truly felt happiness
all I feel now is emptiness.
An angel needs to be sent
to guide me so I won't be alone
and only then will the sadness
that I feel turn into happiness.
Now I don't know what I meant
to say but life can't be that bad
with all it has to offer.
I just need to think of the things I had
and I'll find a way without suffer
and that angel won't be needed anymore
because I found my own way to be enraptured.
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Celestial
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06-29-2007, 07:17 PM
- I don't have a title for this haiku, but I still like it. I created it around wintertime.
Warm weather no more,
only cold and troubles to
start the day anew.
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Celestial
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06-29-2007, 07:20 PM
- I don't have a title for this either but I love this limerick that I made.
There once was a pauper named Meg,
who accidentally broke her leg.
She slipped on ice
and then got lice
but no worries, she'll be able to beg.
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psyrien
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06-30-2007, 07:56 AM
I love the imagery you use in your poem Walking Home. It paints the picture well. ^^
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Celestial
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06-30-2007, 06:51 PM
- Thank you. I really wasn't sure how well I did my poems. In my opinion, I'm not good at poetry.
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Seito
Evil Overlord
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06-30-2007, 09:01 PM
The answer to Who am I is a star right?
x3
Beautiful poems~
Now this next part you can choose to ignore if you wish,
but please visit the sticky threads in the forum. Especially the forum index. I wish to have people in there. If you like the idea, then please~ spread the word to your friends.
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Celestial
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06-30-2007, 09:06 PM
- It is. Good job! ^^
I made it easy to guess, didn't I? You really think my poetry is beautiful? Wow, I never saw myself as a poetry person.
Alright, I will check it out when I have more free time. =D
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Seito
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06-30-2007, 09:07 PM
yay~
xD
Well I can't write poetry to save my life. xD Unless it's freestyle but that's not fun~
Thank you~ xD No one seems to notice they're there. So my mission today is to the spread the word (while I catch up on reading) XD
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Miss Charlaine
(^._.^)ノ
Banned
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06-30-2007, 09:11 PM
You're very talented! My favorite is 'Walking Home'
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Celestial
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06-30-2007, 09:12 PM
- Thanks, Charlie. <3
I love that one too. I'm glad you like my poetry. :)
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