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Old 06-29-2007, 06:43 PM

  • Hello, and welcome to my little writing thread. Here I will post up my poems, drabbles, limericks, short stories and more as a practice so I can get used to writing more.

    I like constructive criticism but don't be too harsh.

    If you have any comments, they are also welcome.

    Thank you! ^^

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Old 06-29-2007, 06:47 PM

  • Weather Facade
    Tears of blue flow down my face
    as I ponder about my day.
    I rely on a helping hand
    to make this sadness go away.
    My mind is hazy with thoughts
    that flow in and out.
    Staring at the window,
    waiting for the rain to stop.
    The cheery sun soon took over
    and a grin decorated my face,
    the weather controlling my facade.

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Old 06-29-2007, 06:52 PM

  • Who am I?
    You can never see me in daytime
    but I am here waiting
    for the day to end
    so I can be seen once again.
    When nighttime arrives,
    I twinkle in amusement
    when I see how the world is living.
    I hear a wish from a child
    and I know I can't grant it
    now I have to wait for the night to end.

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Old 06-29-2007, 07:05 PM

  • This is a poem about my old neighborhood. I live in a much better neighborhood now.

    Walking Home
    Walking back home used to be a daily routine
    smelling the sweet scent of bread coming from the store,
    when I know that they'll close down in a month.
    Buildings covered in yellow like the golden sun
    just to have graffiti on the walls one day
    only to be repainted the next.
    I hear greetings in other languages all the time
    just to hear that makes me smile in pride.
    Even though I hear the drunk yell late at night,
    I'm used to the noise and it won't frighten me at all
    but I really hate it when he shouts out "Opa."

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Old 06-29-2007, 07:13 PM

  • Finding Hope
    Too much time went
    since I truly felt happiness
    all I feel now is emptiness.
    An angel needs to be sent
    to guide me so I won't be alone
    and only then will the sadness
    that I feel turn into happiness.
    Now I don't know what I meant
    to say but life can't be that bad
    with all it has to offer.
    I just need to think of the things I had
    and I'll find a way without suffer
    and that angel won't be needed anymore
    because I found my own way to be enraptured.

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Old 06-29-2007, 07:17 PM

  • I don't have a title for this haiku, but I still like it. I created it around wintertime.

    Warm weather no more,
    only cold and troubles to
    start the day anew.

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Old 06-29-2007, 07:20 PM

  • I don't have a title for this either but I love this limerick that I made.

    There once was a pauper named Meg,
    who accidentally broke her leg.
    She slipped on ice
    and then got lice
    but no worries, she'll be able to beg.

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Old 06-30-2007, 07:56 AM

I love the imagery you use in your poem Walking Home. It paints the picture well. ^^

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Old 06-30-2007, 06:51 PM

  • Thank you. I really wasn't sure how well I did my poems. In my opinion, I'm not good at poetry.

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Old 06-30-2007, 09:01 PM

The answer to Who am I is a star right?
x3
Beautiful poems~

Now this next part you can choose to ignore if you wish,
but please visit the sticky threads in the forum. Especially the forum index. I wish to have people in there. If you like the idea, then please~ spread the word to your friends.

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Old 06-30-2007, 09:06 PM

  • It is. Good job! ^^

    I made it easy to guess, didn't I? You really think my poetry is beautiful? Wow, I never saw myself as a poetry person.

    Alright, I will check it out when I have more free time. =D

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Old 06-30-2007, 09:07 PM

yay~
xD
Well I can't write poetry to save my life. xD Unless it's freestyle but that's not fun~

Thank you~ xD No one seems to notice they're there. So my mission today is to the spread the word (while I catch up on reading) XD

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Old 06-30-2007, 09:11 PM

You're very talented! My favorite is 'Walking Home'

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Old 06-30-2007, 09:12 PM

  • Thanks, Charlie. <3

    I love that one too. I'm glad you like my poetry. :)

 


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