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Old 10-13-2007, 06:59 AM

I wrote a poem, myself. Sure, it's kinda bad. I've never been the writing sort. But, oi. I tried, mate. xDDD Btw, it's about a car. Cletus is the name of my car [yes, I named it that xD] that I've had since 2004. Loooong time for a car, in my opinion. So. It's rainbow coloured and it's rather like a bus. xDDD But I luff it. <3 It's a good car and wins any race I enter it in. Hence me describing it so lamely as a first car champ. xD Please, please, please, tell me what you think it's missing or already has. :]

"Cletus"

Fastest engine;
Soaring jet;
First place winner;
That you can bet.

Held fast tires;
Rainbow paint;
Drive for miles;
Through the rain.

Cletus, Cletus;
Push the pedal!
Cletus, Cletus;
Earn the medal!

Always winning;
First car champ;
Beating slow cars;
On the ramps.

Faster, faster!
Gaining speed;
Cletus is coming;
Cars: take heed.

Cletus, Cletus;
Push the pedal!
Cletus, Cletus;
Earn the medal!

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Old 10-13-2007, 09:17 PM

I like it. The repetition fits the poem. It almost sounds more like a chant to me than a poem. I could picture people chanting this in the stands while a rainbow bus raced against the finest machines in a nascar race! I really like the imagery and the subject.

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Old 10-15-2007, 10:52 PM

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Originally Posted by Immortaleyes
I like it. The repetition fits the poem. It almost sounds more like a chant to me than a poem. I could picture people chanting this in the stands while a rainbow bus raced against the finest machines in a nascar race! I really like the imagery and the subject.
Wow, thank you! ^_^ Hehe, I sometimes think it in my head, so that's where I got the idea to even write something down. But thank you very much!

 


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