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Old 10-13-2007, 03:04 PM

My girlfriend wrote this poem.
She has it permanently labeled as a poem with no name.
Tell me what you think, and let me know of any suggestions you may have for a title.

Quote:
What if people couldn't cry?
Couldn't tell truth from a lie.
Holding all their emotions in,
seeming not to regret a sin.
Drowning in the hurt and pain...
Living a hard life, in shame.
Sometimes just wanting to let go.
Not a single person would know.
'Cause we can't show pain, or cry.
Just let the days slowly slip by.
Everything will be okay...
Most likely on another day.

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Old 10-13-2007, 03:09 PM

It's beautiful! But I don't know a good title for it.

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Old 10-13-2007, 04:56 PM

the only thing i can think of using Another Day as th title... i fond using something from the last line in the title..... thats how i sum things up... =/
well if that didnt help.. good luck on finding one.... and that poem beautiful and has a lot of meaning within it =]

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Old 10-13-2007, 05:56 PM

What about Emotionless?

I just thought it might fit because she is talking about not being able to show emotion.

I'm rarely good at coming up with titles. Most of my poetry is untitled.

 


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