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Old 10-13-2007, 03:46 PM

I'm sitting in the schools bathroom,
With a razor in my hand,
Blood flowing down my arms,
Seeking one demand.
I wanted my life to be taken,
To be done and say good bye,
Although you never saw me,
You will always here my cry.
His new precious girlfriend,
Sees me hanging from the stall,
She sees my wrists cut open,
And blood all over the wall.
On the wall written in blood said,
I love you and you knew it from the start,
Did you even care,
When you ripped me apart?
His girlfriend screamed real loud,
And then he ran inside,
He saw my cold body,
And then began to cry.
Oh how could you do this,
Leave me here this way,
I love you too don't leave,
Is all he had to say.
He came to me and hugged me,
And he must have heard my cry,
Because he whispered slowly,
I love you please don't die.
He found my bloody razor,
And said he could not resist,
He slit his throat and bled with me,
And for the first time, we kissed.
I love you we said to each other,
This moment we shall cherish,
Together we had lived,
And together we shall perish


C+C please?

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Old 10-13-2007, 03:56 PM

yea like you said very emo-ish.. but i think think it was good.. when i read it, it flowed very nicely and i didnt get stuck at parts.. and it was pretty cute in a way
personally, i liked it =]

 


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