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#1
Old 10-15-2007, 10:26 PM

here is a poem for my crush. It is called "Admiring you from afar". Here it is:

Standing by myself
Admiring you from afar
Wishing you were here
Standing here beside me.

Wishing I could talk
And tell you how I feel
But until then I
will adimire you from afar

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Old 10-15-2007, 10:31 PM

not bad at all, simple and yet sweet!

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Old 10-17-2007, 03:20 PM

look at my new look

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Old 10-17-2007, 11:35 PM

It's short, sweet, and to the point.

I like it.

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Old 10-18-2007, 02:20 AM

I like it, it's cute and straight to the point even if it is a short peom. Well done.

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Old 10-18-2007, 02:59 PM

I wonder who rated it dumb?

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Old 10-19-2007, 12:28 AM

Ok this is my OPINION and it shouldnt mater what I SAY to YOU but here it is. The poem could be better composed it could have posably rymed or posably been longer? I felt you repeated too much. Not all of it is in my opinion "could be better"ish i loved the way you wrote it down. Style to me is nearly half the poem itself. To me if the poem is good and the style its writen or typed in is good then ill give it a 10 yours i give on a scale of 1-10 a 7 or 8. Very good very good indeed.

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#8
Old 10-19-2007, 03:13 PM

ok so it wasn't all bad right?

 


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