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Yosuke
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10-15-2007, 10:26 PM
here is a poem for my crush. It is called "Admiring you from afar". Here it is:
Standing by myself
Admiring you from afar
Wishing you were here
Standing here beside me.
Wishing I could talk
And tell you how I feel
But until then I
will adimire you from afar
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Nick Evans
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10-15-2007, 10:31 PM
not bad at all, simple and yet sweet!
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Yosuke
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10-17-2007, 03:20 PM
look at my new look
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Queen Fool
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10-17-2007, 11:35 PM
It's short, sweet, and to the point.
I like it.
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Provocative and Talkative
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10-18-2007, 02:20 AM
I like it, it's cute and straight to the point even if it is a short peom. Well done.
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Yosuke
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10-18-2007, 02:59 PM
I wonder who rated it dumb?
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Satanic Chick
Dead Account Holder
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10-19-2007, 12:28 AM
Ok this is my OPINION and it shouldnt mater what I SAY to YOU but here it is. The poem could be better composed it could have posably rymed or posably been longer? I felt you repeated too much. Not all of it is in my opinion "could be better"ish i loved the way you wrote it down. Style to me is nearly half the poem itself. To me if the poem is good and the style its writen or typed in is good then ill give it a 10 yours i give on a scale of 1-10 a 7 or 8. Very good very good indeed.
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Yosuke
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10-19-2007, 03:13 PM
ok so it wasn't all bad right?
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