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Old 01-15-2008, 07:52 PM

I'm wondering how I could kill one of my characters off. She is just going back to her village that was destroyed and then rebuilt to rule over it. Her only friend comes there when he follws her when she is taking away and comes to her rescue when he sees she's in trouble about to be killed. She finds out she likes him maybe even loves him after he tells her how he feels about her.

One of her servents that came and got her wants to be with him, but since he's with Sanoko that can't happen. She wants to get rid of Sanoko so that she can have him.


I was thinking about having her try many times to kill her, but it doesn't happen because she's always saved. I was thinking posion would finally be the last thing she tries and it does kill her. Though I'm not sure of it. I would also like ideas on what those other attempts could be.

I would also like help with writing a battle scene.

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Old 01-16-2008, 02:37 AM

Well, you could make a quiet reference to Norse mythology by having someone shoot her with an arrow made of a sprig of mistletoe.

By the way, check the Mary Sue Litmus Tests on these characters, mkay? Always a good idea.

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Old 01-16-2008, 02:56 AM

Thanks and I already did that and it said they weren't. I know I have things that would make them that, but it's not a lot of them. Sanoko doesn't mope about her past she tries to live in the present and not let it get her down She likes to draw and is basically the only thing she's really good at cause it's the only thing she's really really worked on. Everyone doesn't want her, only one person does. She doesn't think she looks good and some other people don't either.

What else do you want to know about my character?

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Old 01-16-2008, 10:20 AM

Poison is a fairly complex way to go about things, although there are writers guides to poisons. Some are considerably more subtle than others so are something to take into consideration if the Servant is going to resort to that.
There are writers guides to that sort of thing you can buy though, they probably appear on Amazon and the like. I have one called "Deadly Doses" from when i figured I wanted to write mysteries. It's alphabetical and describes everything you might need to know. It's also kinda creepy to notice how many house hold plants are poisonous and what they would do to you if for some reason you happened to eat them.
Also if you decide you want her to die, what then happens to the servant? Is she caught? Does she score the guy of her dreams? Is he still the guy of her dreams afterward or was it a case of Sour grapes? :3

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Old 01-16-2008, 09:23 PM

Ok that sounds cool, but I don't really want to buy a book on it just for one thing. Though I might end up doing so just see all the ways.

I haven't really thought about whether she gets caught or not though I'm probably going to have her get caught. She does not get the guy he doesn't want to be with her, he wants to be with Sanoko so after she's gone he probably won't go out with anyone else. She will still want him because of how good he looks to her and how nice he is or more like was to Sanoko. She's good him even if he isn't one of their kind and still wants him.

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Old 01-22-2008, 10:29 PM

Trying a bunch of different ways could get really boring to read after a while. Try one way, and focus more on how she fabricates the plan, maybe? If you want to go with poison, focus on how she plans it - how's she going to get it to her, where's she get it? Any kinks in the plan when she actually carries it out? Is she absolutely heartless or does she feel some emotion? Remember, your characters can't all be heartless killers like horror movie psychopaths. That just gets flat and annoying to read about! They need more than two dimensions to be interesting!

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Old 01-22-2008, 10:37 PM

I wasn't going to try too many ways. I was going to have three attempts before going to the poison and I was going to write out her plan and how she goes about it and the sort. I already have a good place she's going to get it; off the Black Market in their village. I know how she is going to get it to her. I kind of already got the poison plan planned out. I just want to know if it is something good to go with and other ways to kill her off. She does have some emotion, but she won't really show it she doesn't want people to see that side of her. She'd rather they see the heartless mean side of her.

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Old 01-30-2008, 07:31 PM

maybe you should have her kill herself or something? poison is okay..but... I don't know..when I kill off characters it's usually the ones I like the most.

 


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