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02-17-2008, 05:19 PM
These two poems are my most recent poems.
I hope you enjoy them.
Read and Comment on them.
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Will You:
Can you live in a reality full of dreams?
I have found that my dreams have been real
But they are dreams,
Can this happen?
How come it's happening?
I'm lost within my self
A dream of reality
If my dreams have been coming true will my nightmares come true as well?
I'm lost and I will never be real,
I'm lost and never found
One time can I have a dream that's fake
Can I?
Can I?
I need to be alone in this,
But being alone is what I fear the most?
Will you take my hand and guide me?
Will you help me get through this real nightmare?
Will you save my being and not despite what has come true overall this whole situation?
Will you save me from this real dream?
Will you?
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02-17-2008, 05:20 PM
THIS PERSON
This person makes me smile in every way possible
This person was there for me
This person made her and me
This person was in my dreams
This person was in everything
This person was hiding from the reality of the truth
This person didn’t change
This person doesn’t care what immature people think
This person is my only, right now
This person makes me smile in the darkest of time
This person is my Best friend
But I cannot see it
This person gets sad and mad
Like you and me
This person is happy at one time and sad another
I love this person so much
This person loves me so much
We would make the perfect being
But we can’t
Because she’s you and I’m me
I love her so
She loves me
We will live together
For ever you see
Me and this person
Me and you
Brock and Alyssa
We have some laughing to do!
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02-17-2008, 05:24 PM
I really enjoyed the first one. I havent read the second on yet but will get to it soon enough. You show promise and i hope you continue writing.
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02-17-2008, 05:33 PM
Thank you very much for the comments.
I just write what i think should be writen about.
Most of my poetry is something i feel or something about me.
I just made this poem
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Time
The time of the whole person isn't real
Time isn't something you can come to steal
The heart of someone so pure and define
A heart of someone who is you and not mine
the power and desire of ones wants
it's like a ghost
a ghost to comes and haunts
a past life being of someones broken heart
someone who is lost and is falling apart
a ghost of truth, vain, and lies
why don't they wonder to the place above the skys?
the feeling of this truthful scam
is someone like a pearl hiding in a clam
the faith of you in side of us
is so deep, devine and like a loving trust
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02-17-2008, 05:36 PM
I think Time is my favorite of the three so far. It goes very deep and im sure everybody can connect with it easily.
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02-17-2008, 05:37 PM
Thank you very much.
I really happen to enjoy time as well.
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02-17-2008, 05:48 PM
Woah. Those are really in depth. I agree with Manseutus, you do show a lot of promise. Keep up the wonderful work.
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02-17-2008, 08:20 PM
Than kyou so much for the comments. It helps me to do more Poems.. Thank you.
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06-01-2008, 06:21 PM
Read them?
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