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Old 02-23-2008, 05:44 AM

Well, this poem I wrote when I was in the eleventh grade and I am thinking about revising it. However, I would like to see others opinion on it. I haven't really had the time to start revising it, since I just recently recieved an email with it from where I has entered in is a contest a while back where I had a chance to publish it. xD I have yet to chose to do that since I find it crappy I have to pay for it to be published when someone is requesting me to publish it :lol: I do not remember the original indentions I put in it, but I think this is close. The copy they sent me was in paragraph form, which I KNOW i did not send it in as. xD Right now I am hunting for the book I originally wrote this in so I can see that part.

Title: Silver Ash Roses

As the coldness takes over
My frozen and wilting soul
Will you remember me?
Or will you leave me alone in this dying world
Made of the silver and cold pain of our hearts.
Will my ashes lay as a symbol For eternal remorse.... Or will they stand as your regret
For sticking the thorns of pain in my withering heart?
When you see a rose Will you feel guilty?
Or do you not remember me at all?
The stem stands as me, staring back at you.
The thorns symbolize the knife, at which you stab me with.
The vine is me falling, yelling out why!
The crimson red petal are the blood of eternal loves betrayel.
But what if you saw a Silver Ash Rose?
Will the silver remind you of me?
Or the coldness in all hearts bleeding?
Will he ashes of with it had blossomed from, remind you of remorse?
Or of a deadly, dark regret?
Will the rose itself remind you of deep suffering, quietness, or the meaning of beautifully sinister?
I am but a Silver Ash Rose And nothing more.

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Old 02-29-2008, 10:36 PM

I like it. :D

 


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