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Old 04-17-2008, 12:39 AM

I just wrote some random poems and stuff you are welcome to critizise


borderline
dead inside
I don't mind
falling to pieces

count me in
violent
let's begin
feeding the sickness

how do I
simplify
dislocate
the enemy's on the way

full of fear
ever clear
I'll be here
fighting forever

curious
venomous
you'll find me
climbing to heaven

nevermind
turn back time
you'll be fine
I will get left behind.

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Old 04-17-2008, 12:40 AM

I’ve never known a love like yours
Nor thought it could be true,
But every time I kiss your lips
I feel what love can do

With hair like silk
And lips so tender,
Each moment with you
Makes my heart surrender

I couldn’t live, I couldn’t breathe
Without you by my side,
Never will I let you go,
My love will never hide

And in my heart you’ll always be
From now until forever,
No matter what, no matter where
We’ll always be together



When all the songs are over
and all the words been said
The sun grows dim across the sky
and the world prepares for bed

I oft can take a moment now
to view the sky above
and whisper God a simple prayer
to thank him for your love



Every time I look at you
my heart skips a beat
I wonder if you know, my love,
that my heart is at your feet
I leave it there for you to do
whatever that you wish
You could take my heart,
and love me,
Or just leave me in this bliss.

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Old 04-17-2008, 12:41 AM

GoodBye My Angel Dear

My Days Draw Long and Weary
When you are no longer near
Confidence is filled with questions
Strength replaced with fear.

The assuredness that I awake with each day
is nowhere to be found,
As Though my dreams and aspirations
were buried underground.

I hear your voice being carried by the wind
Like your fingers through my hair
I close my eyes and remember your kiss
And wish that you were there.

So with nothing left but one thing to say
to resolve my heartbreak here,
goodbye my darling and my love
goodbye my angel dear.

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Old 04-20-2008, 12:41 PM

w0w trin I had no idea that you were so good! I really enjoyed reading some of those and all I can really say is keep the good work coming. You really seem to have a talent there with your writing and I don't think you should stop. I really enjoyed them because they were a little different, not what I was used to.

 


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