hello stranger


andrew was walking in an alley on a cold winter morning. his toes were deep in the sno and ice cut his feet. he stumbled into a diner. a pretty young woman stopped and stared at the shabby young man.
" would you like some pie?",the woman whispered
the boy turned out his empty pokets and frowned.
"its on the house sweetie", she said as she let her hair down from her bun. the golden locks bounce into her face.
"yes please miss."
"the name is darla", the girl said as she took his hand and lead him to the kitchen

:kiss:

Very interesting so far. Is there any more or are you still working on it?

That's good and I agree with Bookwriter. Still will you write more to the story? It would be fascinating to find out what happens here!!!! I'll be waitin' till ya' do. ;)

It's interesting enough, but could definitely use some work. You need to do a spell-check and capitalize certain words. Some grammar could be applied...you're sentences don't flow very well.

OOOh Darla!
I'd go over it and add the needed punctuation marks and such, but it's interesting so far.

Interesting huh? One rare proof that choice of words can weigh more than technical style. Still, wasn't this posted like 2 months ago?